If biography done: 1) Reflect upon your group individual success criteria

I feel that I have successfully achieved my group's and my success criteria because I have managed to do all of those. Even though I find some bits challenging, such as to be able to predict a consequence upon a certain action, I have successfully managed to pull it off. I find others easy, such as to be able to research independently and come up with a set of organised notes to put inside the final biography, because I have done a lot of planning before and I know how is is structured. I managed to achieve all of the group success criteria except to P.E.E.L. (Point, Evidence, Explain and Link) because I find it slightly hard to P.E.E.L. when you are writing a biography.

I managed to achieve all my individual success criteria and I found it pretty easy because I have used these skills in a lot of my projects. I also found that they were extremely useful when I used them with my writing. These success criterias have helped my by guiding me with various different ways. All in all, I feel that I have achieved most of my success criteria and I will work to develop on the others the next time.

Reflection After Biography: How has your biography connected you to this issue?

I feel as if I connected to it because I feel the difference of my life compared to theirs. We often complain about our daily lives but in reality, there are a lot more children in a lot worse situation than ours. So when I wrote this, I felt really lucky and I used empathy to make me feel more connected to the main character, and I keep asking myself, what would I do in this situation? This always helps me put myself in their shoes and I find it easier to do. Even though I put empathy, I still find it a little hard to believe how cruel can people be.

ELP

I can finally post my ELP! Here is my section A and B! Click on the picture if you want to zoom in!

You Zhen_9X_ELP Section B

Humanities Child Soldiers Biography

This is my child soldiers biography. There might be some minor errors here and there but all the events that happened are true, just pieced together from different sources and times. I hope you enjoy it!


You Zhen_9X_Humanities Child Soldiers Biography

How can a peer review of work be helpful?

I think a peer review is extremely helpful because it can be beneficial to both ourselves and the other students. We get to have constructive criticism on our work to improve where we missed out anything or where we need some clarification on. I have done quite a lot of peer reviews using and realised that I often miss out somethings and have some vague parts which my peer will always point out to me to make my writing clearer. We can also help the others by giving comments for where they might need to improve on. All in all, I think peer reviews are extremely useful to everyone since it'll give us a sense on what we need to improve in our writing.

Describe your progress on your ELP due November 15.

I'm in the midst of finishing Section A. I've listed almost all the things I know that relates to human rights. I have a clear intention of which issue I will be focusing on. I would most likely be working with the issue of child soldiers since I have done a lot of research on it and I have a basic idea of what I would like to do. I'm moving on to Section B where I have to find clothes that make a statement and why.

Discuss your biography/post your plan/talk about how you will present your individual.

I will write my biography in a first person diary style to make it more realistic and have more empathy for the protagonist. I will separate my story into several different sections, to show how different the life was when each event happened. Each event is going to be separated by a few days so it wouldn’t be too repetitive. My character’s name is going to be a boy in Myanmar called: Khine Chankrisna (translated to mean “Firm Tree”). His dad’s name is: Hla Thet Myaing (translated to mean “Beautiful Calm Forest”). His mum’s name is: Thant Kyi Nanda (translated to mean “Clean Clear River”).

Part 1: Life in Peace.

Here we find Khine Chankrisna telling his normal daily life with his family. His family are farmers, where they live poor, but peaceful and happy. We find him telling about farming and his normal chores where he help out his parents.

Part 2: The Unexpected Turn.

This time, we find how Khine Chankrisna gets captured and how his parents died. He will tell how his sister and himself got captured by the army and how he got into servitude. This part will be a bit violent as the army will burn down houses and kill off their parents. They will be locked up by the army until they want to join the army. He then was forced to make a pact that he will do the best he can otherwise the army will kill him.

Part 3: Training in Hell.

Khine starts his army training and he gets treated very atrociously. He gets treated as an adult even though his body structure is not as developed yet. In this part, he also learns that his sister is a servant and a slave for the army and this builds up his anger.

Part 4: The Recruitment.

This part Khine will be forced to start recruiting more child soldiers and killing off parents. Here the face the fear by "drinking the victim's blood", a tradition by the army to make them not afraid of killing.

Part 5: The War.

Khine participated in a war against an opposition army in Myanmar called the Shan State Army and he loses one of his leg when he stepped on a mine. No-one stops to help him and he ended up dragging himself towards the opposition, hoping that they will accept him. But it wasn't his lucky day, the Shan State Army got captured while some of them got killed. Khine was caught trying to co-operate with them so he got re-captured by the Burmese army. While they were in jail, he swore to exact revenge on the Army. While in jail, he found a piece of paper and found out the jail was actually built by other slaves. They hid the paper which shows the secret exit. He then starts to formulate a plan and decides to exact vengeance on the army.



By showing how Khine was treated, I can link to how many Human Rights were broken. I also might put in how his father has previously told him the lives of other people on the planet, which may lead Khine to think how come they have things like freedom and justice while he doesn't. I will look back to my research and see which Human Rights I can put in there that were violated.



By the way, this is a rough plan. I might deduct and add somethings while I'm writing.